Show don't tell

1. The hero was strong and handsome. He was admired by the townspeople. He was brave and wished to help those in need.

A man walked down the street, a tall man with a muscular build, Drawing the attention of everyone around him. As he walked down the street townspeople cheered, out of the corner of his eye a girl is crying> He runs towards her in a state of panick, “what is it little girl!?” he says trying to catch his breath, “I can’t find my mum” says the little girl inbetween sobs. “Ill help you find her!” And with that the handsome man whisks the little girl into his arms to comfort her and strolls off in search of her mum.

2. The wizard was ugly and evil. The people of the town were terrified of him. He enjoyed threatening them, especially the children. He was cruel and greedy.

It was chaos! Children ran screaming through the streets, people banging on doors begging to be let inside. “ahhhh!” came a scream from behind me I turned around and that’s when I saw him, I saw the darkness that clouded his presence, his evil stare. He had cornered a young child.

1. The land was beautiful, but harsh. The town was safe from the elements, but outside could be dangerous if one did not take precautions.

Walking through the strawberry field was peaceful, the sweet sent of ripe strawberries wafting through the air, the soft grass inbetween my toes, It was perfect. As the sun started to set a storm started to roll in and in a matter of seconds I was running back to town in the poring rain. The grass was no longer soft under my feet, Instead slimy mud, The sent of ripe strawberries replaced by the smell of rain. As I was running I could sense the worst of the storm creeping up behind me, The wind was getting stronger, the rain was getting heavier until, BANG! the thunder started. The rain got heavier and heavier until where I was running was no longer clear, all I could see was blur. As I came to a halt I managed to find shelter under a tree. As the rain started to ease I Ran back to the shelter of the town.

Task: using your senses to write

Situation: It was time for breakfast. Sense: Smell/Taste

I walked downstairs hit by the smell of freshly buttered toast. As I get closer I begin to hear the crackling and popping of the salty bacon. As I sit down at the table with my breakfast I pop my egg and the luscious, goo oozes onto my toast. I stab my bacon with my fork and move it into my mouth, but not before submerging it into the runny goo, of the egg yolk. A salty sticky sensation arose in my mouth as I crunched the yolk covered bacon.

Situation: It was a dark and stormy night Sense: Hear

It was a dark and stormy night, I lay in my bed listening to the rain drops pound against my window. Then came the drumming of the thunder, loud and sharp. I lay there as the short sharp shocks of lightning came, sending shiveres down my spine as I lay in the dark room listening to the anger of the night

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